I am really enjoying this series. I actually read much of it last night, but had to come back and leave a comment. I applaud you getting such a well written series out so quickly.
I like your characterizations and how you’re setting up their relationship. Like with this -
Stark had poked right through that, deliberately learning a foreign field of scientific study just to be able to converse on the same level as Bruce could - and with a true understanding of the subject. He realizes now that it was a calculated move. Stark had pierced his shell the way minor upsets or pokes with sharp objects couldn't do. Subtly, and waking Bruce's interest in - anything again, almost before he could even realize it. Bruce is grateful for that...
I like the motive you give to Stark’s obsessive studying. It’s not just to be the smartest, or to know all he can about the situation. It’s also to be able to communicate with Bruce in particular. Right away you set up their connection.
Stark looks at him over his sunglasses, as if he can't believe someone as smart as Bruce was could be so obtuse. "No. I'm sorry - are we having the same conversation? I don't think we are. I'm talking about the fact that I can see you pushing us away and trying to prove us - me - wrong so there won't be any hesitation if we think you're a danger."
Stark drops the statement into a silent atmosphere and Bruce is genuinely startled by how easily someone like Tony Stark had seen through him. If Stark could see all that from the limited exposure he'd had to Bruce - he was more than he let on, too.
I love that exchange and realization on Bruce’s part. But also, I like how insightful you are making Tony. And especially that he has something in mind for Bruce more than just tinkering in the lab or seducing him. He wants to help him, find his limits, give him some breathing room in his own skin.
Love the exchange about Bruce’s guilt and taking credit for saving people. I’m sure you’ve been told before that you are very good at writing dialogue.
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Date: 1 Jun 2012 05:24 (UTC)I like your characterizations and how you’re setting up their relationship. Like with this -
Stark had poked right through that, deliberately learning a foreign field of scientific study just to be able to converse on the same level as Bruce could - and with a true understanding of the subject. He realizes now that it was a calculated move. Stark had pierced his shell the way minor upsets or pokes with sharp objects couldn't do. Subtly, and waking Bruce's interest in - anything again, almost before he could even realize it. Bruce is grateful for that...
I like the motive you give to Stark’s obsessive studying. It’s not just to be the smartest, or to know all he can about the situation. It’s also to be able to communicate with Bruce in particular. Right away you set up their connection.
Stark looks at him over his sunglasses, as if he can't believe someone as smart as Bruce was could be so obtuse. "No. I'm sorry - are we having the same conversation? I don't think we are. I'm talking about the fact that I can see you pushing us away and trying to prove us - me - wrong so there won't be any hesitation if we think you're a danger."
Stark drops the statement into a silent atmosphere and Bruce is genuinely startled by how easily someone like Tony Stark had seen through him. If Stark could see all that from the limited exposure he'd had to Bruce - he was more than he let on, too.
I love that exchange and realization on Bruce’s part. But also, I like how insightful you are making Tony. And especially that he has something in mind for Bruce more than just tinkering in the lab or seducing him. He wants to help him, find his limits, give him some breathing room in his own skin.
Love the exchange about Bruce’s guilt and taking credit for saving people. I’m sure you’ve been told before that you are very good at writing dialogue.